Nineve
Nineve, I am looking forward to this book continuing the concept is great and the characters are built well and show great potential! Please don't lose heart or courage because of a glitch you have made a great start ,read what you have written and get the flow of the story back in your heart and let the words come out of your heart!
the quality of English in this story is honestly shocking. with some basic editing it could have been acceptable even with the generally poor quality writing outside of the grammatical mistakes. the story in the first chapter jumps from in a parking lot to suddenly take off the school day is over it's very confusing to follow what is going on