Mystical World

In the center of the world, Eternal Academy exist. Su Yun, a student of this academy, suddenly found out the secret of this academy, the secret that destroy his ordinary and peaceful life, the secret that could either turn him into a powerful individual or a person who would die and vanish like others. Please comment if this work of mine has a potential. Honestly, i already know where would this novel leads to and has an idea what to do next but im having a hard time on how to wrote it well. Criticisms are accepted, ill use it as a reference to develop myself