Mushoku Tensei: Andrei Greyrat

Writing Quality 5/5 Stability of Updates 5/5 Story Development 5/5 Character Design 5/5 World Background 5/5 Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy.

Interesting story, it progresses a bit slow, but not as slow as those that are slow, where they spend 20 chapters of their childhood describing things that are not important xD. - And consider these girls (the elf with the curse, roxy, the mother of eris with eris (how the teleportation will happen, it would be great if the protagonist teleports with mother and daughter), the "trainer" of "Eris" , the princess "Aria" (although she is somewhat perverted, but nothing like disciplining her to be an obedient wife xD), the neko and the school dog, etc).

Writing Quality 5/5 Stability of Updates 5/5 Story Development 5/5 Character Design 5/5 World Background 5/5 Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy, Roxy.

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a question about your story, hopefully read it: -hara de rudeus equal to the original with her harem (hopefully not the same, it would be better if she only stayed with the elf from the beginning of where she lives, and the rest for the protagonist). -And you consider the mature woman as the mother of "Eris", since if I remember correctly she died with her father and only her grandfather remains, who also died.

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It's a very nice novel in my opinion. Though the novel has only 13 chapters as of this review, but it flows nicely and doesn't feel wrong or just straight up just real MC following the MC of the world, which I like very much. Though not really novel the use of non Earth reincarnated MC with anime knowledge adds a bit of nice flavour to it.

Nah overall this novel is good, maybe it can be developed in the writing section and added some conflicts that trouble MC (・∀・) Lilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilialilia

I will review this great quality work, for I am gandalf to help my children in the future for the greater good, *cough* anyway i will give the novel a 5 rating cause I always try to find a fanfic about mushuko tensei, but let get back on the topic the mc was killed by truck-chan and he was reincarnated as rudeus older brother and the mc in his past life read light novel so i can assume he knows about magic and swords stuff but the mc doesn't know the plot because he didn't read the novel or manga so he gotta be careful so that's my review it's my first time making a review, (idk if this is even a review) but i hope you appreciate my review and this is for the greater good

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Author-san how long is it going to take you to re-write all chapters? May i suggest making the mc a little more perverted. also can you release all chapter at once after you are done rewriting it.

A few things that you must improve since you are doing a rewrite. FIrst. More interactions between Rudeous and MC, they are brothers, reincarnators of the same world, they should have a lot of stuff to talk about, converse with eachother about their findings in magic and all. Rudeus may be weak physically, but the dude has a lot of imagination for magic. It would be a huge shame if he ends up the same as original power wise. Also you made rudeous be seen as a minior character that was just to be the brother of MC. Rudeus is one of the MAIN characters, so he cannot be put as background. Another improvement would be that you DONT stick so much to the original novel, i mean, there were whole chapters that were almost 90% the same as the novel, thats not something you should do as the butterfly effect of Rudeus having a reincarnator twin brother are HUGE. The mc interactions with Glisaline were odd because you listened to a random dude that did not like she did it with MC father years ago before he was born.... and speaking about her, Ghislaine, she is in her 30s by the time rudeus meets her, already past her prime age, so try to make her younger somehow..... Now about this, you should know or at least MC should know that aging is because cells cannot multiply themselves fast enough. As one grows up to being an adult, they multiply cells extremely fast and this slows down after they reach the 100% adult state, from then on, cells divide slower and slower as you age, this is why people look old, as cells cannot replace the skin cells fast enough and each consecutive cell is weaker than the previous one.... So, to regain "youth" you must make the body cells be reinvigorated so that they can multiply themselves as fast as when one reached the prime age (21 or so). This way one would regain their "Youth". MC could make a spell to analyze the cells of Sylphy for example and test with the youth magic with animals, to make a healing magic that reinvigorated cells from mana. The king healing magic can regrow an arm, that healing magic is already doing what mc needs.. ALso, try to not make it so forceful the whole thing with Lilia and teach Roxy some science stuff, like why fire burns for example. She has no idea why, she just accepts it, it irked me a lot that mc did not teach that stuff that would improve their magic by a huge margin. About Eris family, to save them you must think very well how you will do it. You must protect FLUFF!!!!!!.... As for paul dying... well it helped rudeus mature a lot, but thats for when he was alone, now he has MC to get a partner to shoulder things with. Speaking of the teleportation calamity, due to mc, it no longer can be the same, meaning, that Zenith may not end up inside the crystal in that laberith, etc. You must also consider the whole Hitogami thing, as it may be possible for MC to kill him, there is also the issue with Dragon god Orsted. For him, MC and rudeus are an anomaly.... what else... oh yea, POWER UP ROXY.... Lastly, it bothered me that mc created new magics, but did not teach them to rudeus and viceversa. I mean come on!... 2 dudes from earth and they dont brainstorm magic together to make new stuff!??!. Power up roxy, enough said... Also make juicy XXX chapters.

Noooooooo!! Why does this have to be rewritten..wait? so being rewritten ...does this mean all previous chaps will be released in bulk or just the same old slow pace?? --------------------------------- I need new chapters not the old ones .... seems like i have to wait *sigh*

Author writes very well until it seems that it is not his first story very good grammar and it helps that the author tbm is reading the LN of the series so he has knowledge and mastery of the series. Honestly story very good for those who want to follow an MC who knows nothing of the story and basically follows the Canon until the author changes him honest and sincere almost a second Rudeos, He is also intelligent and shows traits that he is superior even though he says he is not expected to lose some of his naivety Spoiler : Also for those who don't like that the MC talks about reincarnation he already told the maid and the rudeos so that's it

Shameless Newbie Author review. When I write this story I follow the light novel. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . If you have any suggestions for improvement of the story, please comment down below.

Really hope MC gains a way to have Immortality. I was so sad when I learned that the OG MC of Mushoku Tensei died and left his first lover alone

i see no tag so question for you, is this going to be a harem? Mind you that with harem i mean more than one thank you! Five stars cause creation is hard and you dont see many fanfic from this series

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waiting over, time to read