KanatoMukami
Wow. This is something I don't get a chance to say often, but I was thoroughly impressed with how well the story is written. The details are so on point that you can feel the mood in your heart and you can feel the character's emotions. This story is, I dare say, flawless! I couldn't find a single mistake. The plot and storyline flows so well, effortlessly like a river. I find myself falling in love with this story and the characters. I wish I could give this story more than 5 stars. This is a fantastic story to read!
Characters are wonderfully portrayed, I especially love how natural the interactions between the MC and ML are. The story progression is great and the mystery makes you want to know more. There are a few grammatical errors but overall the writing style is better than most books. Definitely recommended.
A brief yet concise synopsis with some errors here and there - It's not too bad really, but the synopsis is definitely not reflective of the author's actual writing ability. The first chapter starts with a pinch but ends with a heart gripping feeling because of the the insecure yet precious relationship between Cashimir and Eris. Fleshed out characters with flaws and fitting dialogues, the dynamic between these two are very consistent and enjoyable at times. I think that content should be divided into more paragraphs? Big chunky paragraphs of words are not very appealing, however, it is still quite neat in its own way! I think certain places can definitely use help from an editor but it is way more readable than many other books. The names are unique but easy to remember, very fitting in a world of magic. I think the pacing is quite alright, though (spoiler alert) Cashimir's leaving could have been foreshadowed in a few different ways. Overall, I think you did a great job! Romance isn't easy to write and you have created a very individual bond that speaks of your ability to manifest emotion through words.