ElixerJohn
Grammar and tense errors here and there, making the story confusing and unreadable. I pushed through it because I had nothing to read, so I read this out of boredom, and turns out, the story was good. It was mildly entertaining for me. I'd love to see more chapters... The only problem I had when I was reading the story was the grammar and tense errors, nothing more (I think). I don't want to be correcting you all the time. So I'd rate this... 3.6/5 Use Grammarly.