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I'm an amateur author who likes to write stories. Ura Celestia is my first series, so leave some suggestions! i hope you enjoy reading my stories.
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Good and interesting story, but when it comes to first impressions, given that it's an isekai, it'll seem typical and probably bad. Unless, the author make Rei and the isekai little interesting. I talked with the author and his original idea was some kind of death game and something like Re:Zero. I hope he use those idea in his story. I have seen no flaws in the story at the moment, so I'm going to rate it a 5/5. Check out the story!
Hey NeTT, I have a suggestion for your novel. If you are going to use a different perspective in the next chapter, you should use the Third Person view. It gets confusing when perspectives change unwittingly. Jobless Reincarnation uses such a technique and I'm sure it doesn't kill the story.
Grammar and tense errors here and there, making the story confusing and unreadable. I pushed through it because I had nothing to read, so I read this out of boredom, and turns out, the story was good. It was mildly entertaining for me. I'd love to see more chapters... The only problem I had when I was reading the story was the grammar and tense errors, nothing more (I think). I don't want to be correcting you all the time. So I'd rate this... 3.6/5 Use Grammarly.
What Government Office are you talking about? lol Replaced "a" with "the"
I'm confused...
A potential on me. I want that off of me. XD
I'd love to "Thanks" God.
Dora dora dora, the explorda!
"with long years" I would love to see some long years protruding from an elf's head.
The word "irises" doesn't fit. I suggest changing it to "eyes".
lol
I think you should capitalize the word "White" instead of "white" because it is a name.
Why sensor it? XD
That's a wyrm.
Present Tense eh?
Rephrase this
Rephrase this.
What is a "there and there"? You don't need to add a comma. I suggest " He just froze there at whatever position he..." or something like that.