CultivatorDragon
One of the best novels I have read. Keep it up author. (translator) ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
I know this is fanfic but you potrayed all canon characters like your common human not as a Gods or Heroes. I can't imagine Alaya in the way you described, and the others canon character too. And with all those gifts? I can guess your bias as FGO fan is CLEARLY SHOWED, you wanted to hoard every 'awesome' skills, weapon, etc in to your MC and makes those gifts nothing special or unique.
Truthfully speaking, i dont think this will get popular here in webnovel. This fanfic is good, but most webnovel app reader have a dickbrained head so they prob wont like this. Your writing still a lil bit worse tho, I suggest you to try to find some editor and post this at fanfiction.net. This would be a good gold mine there.
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Im writing this cause well look I only read first 2 chapters and I can tell this story is not for me. However I recommend reading this the start was amazing only reason I'm not reading is that I hate Good Guys and Heroes in my FFs, but legit one of the best Prologues I've read on this site. Kudos Author.
This is honest to God a good novel so far. Everything about it I love to death, until chapter 3. The character and development is amazing and beautiful to the point of being like the food from food wars. The only thing I absolutely loathe about it is who you made him be born into. Imran really, why? Just why? Are you trying to kill me? Do you want me dead? Was your dope purpose in doing this just for you to shoot me in the head and feed my corpse to scavenger birds? But yeah, while that made it not for me specifically, this is a really good novel for those in that favor.
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