Aaron_Heart
I really like this story, other than some errors an editor can fix I really like how fluid the story is. Keep it up mr.writer! Donโt sway your story because of some random comment. As long as the story pleases you, people of similar interests will love it as well, you canโt make everyone happy. Though you probably will make a lot of people happy, especially with such a straightforward mc. There are so many stories with a mc blind to romance around him or doesnโt pursue it. I like the way you have things, going forward, keep up the good work.
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Good story, I like it until now. I hope that you don't drop it and continue until the end. I see no problem with the story and the new world but I still wanna say that we don't need an idiot MC who teaches everybody about his styles. Also, you can use grammarly to correct some little faults in the writing. I also use it to write my story. These faults don't appear too much but they still have a little impact. Continue the good work. Happy to be the one to review the story.