Reviews of Beast Monster System
Beast Monster System
CowboyLikeMe
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The story so far, as I haven't read too many chapters yet, seems to be fine. I would even say great. it's the fact that the English is used in a way that is very weird and confusing. it's as if the author doesn't understand how to use the English language correctly. but in weird ways. they know the words of English clearly but they don't know how to use them in sentences and paragraphs to make actual sense. my other complaint is the lack of details during action scenes. simply saying this person attacked and this person avoided the attack then this person attacked and this person avoided the attack as well, I would love to know what the attack was and how it was avoided so that the action scenes are actually interesting instead of being extremely vague and pointless to read about. the story itself so far is exciting and interesting. maybe the author will improve as he goes?
It's a good work, I liked how the protagonist is developing, but for some reason from the 51st chapter on all the other chapters are repeating the 34th chapter, despite being written that it will soon be edited, it's been a long time... and still there was no sign of fixing this .... what a pity it is a good work, I hope the author managed to fix this.
I would give you a higher rating but I'm looking through your story sentences and all I'm seeing is repetition. It may not be a bad thing for some people but it can be annoying and a real drop-off if not corrected soon. I've read multiple chapters and all I hear is how they do this but then they do it again but more specifically like "They looked out the gate and they looked harder to look into the gap." I don't know if that bothers some people but it definitely bothers me. Now I'm not saying it should be prefect grammar and everything should be correct but you need to learn how not to repeat the same point multiple times in a sentence using such a small word bunch. Other than that, great work on your book and I look forward to reading your story more!
