The King Of Arsenal

I gave your writing quality and character design 2 and 3 stars (5 stars to other 3 categories). I've read your wrestler fic and this one and in both the stories I've seen same problem. in every single chapter you upload the MC feels rush of emotion once, feels grateful for everything twice, take a step in long journey thrice, think about the dedication of past, feels grateful for partners/ teammates, feeling surreal ffs he is a reincarnated soul. after reading two three chapters it becomes very repetitive. it would be okay for someone who reads and forget in next ten minutes but for anyone else it makes the story stale. I like where the story is going and I also like how you develop the story just don't repeat the same thing over and over again in different words in every single chapter.

I can only say one thing,the main character is a npc.He gives out such chatgpt responses like he wins man of the match and in his interview he just says things that scream to me this guy does not have emotions.He says the same phrases over and over again like im grateful to the fans,manager.Once you hear one time you're like alright no problem but this guy only has that response.Updates are very stable though so thats a plus.

The big problem with sport fanfic. Is they normally focus on writing about every match. So u get maybe one chapter every 5 chapters about the MC life. Litterally the novel becomes a running tally of every game he plays. While his life get put on hold and all he does is play a sport. It would be soo much better if u only describe the most important games and tell us about his life around them. otherwise it gets super boring and we get used to the games and never have any suspense built for any wins or loses.