It's okay I guess? Not bad, not great, just average. There are still some spelling and grammar errors but I can forgive that since it's a translation. One thing I'm not really liking is the Shirou here, specifically Miyuverse. He doesn't feel like him. Maybe I'm a bit biased since I've seen better characterization on another fanfic. I'm not exactly saying he's completely bad but UBW Shirou would've been a better pick