NewComer714
I'm on chapter 80. This story contains a brain cell virus where the MC is very terrible with various plots here and there which are very forced. The copy paste in this novel makes it look like a Chinese story, even I saw some of the OCs were cliche arrogant young masters. Until this chapter 80, MC is still hiding his identity. I still don't understand why he was hiding, even though there weren't any threats like people chasing his life to kill him. And the crazy thing is that the Yakuza somehow worship him like a God, rubbish plot.
Binged around 150 Chaps all night before stopping. It was very good at first but then the plot becomes repetitive and the pacing became too fast which robbed that good experience I felt in the early chaps.If I have if honest I truly enjoyed the so called 'filler' slife of life chapters you stopped making after a certain point, its gives depth to the character and could have been another plot point to avoid the repetitiveness of the business side. Like you could have explored Mira's life in college and how her relationship with the mc impacted her life there. The reactions of the classmates? How did the treatment of her change when he donated a sum of money to the school? Perhaps you can have some male student attempt to 'flirt' her and how she rejects it and then follwed by the mc showing him that she is his. There is a lot of aspects in his relationship with not only with Mira but also her parents, her sister, his sisters, and etc. There's a lot of plotpoint that could have been explored. These things had a lot of potential that would give depth to your characters. Making them more relatable and easy to sympathize with. But we barely get any of it and then at certain point completely stopped it.There also the problem where you repeatedly told a scene instead of showing it. Like they said "Show not Tell". You did it right with the buying of the marriage ring. You showed us, instead of just saying "He bought an elegant ring" and leave it at that.I believe it was a bad move when you stopped making the so called 'filler' slice-of-slife chaps after the marriage chapter. Those where the things that I enjoyed and helped avoid the reptitiveness of the business side. So much potential but was not explored.Hope this helps you improve author. I geniunely enjoyed reading this book.
quite nice I haven't read the original where author took inspiration from my brain was already fried after 5 chapters 😅 mind u I don't read trash translation on webnovel but that was something else anyway it's quiet good I mean author is proving better translation better storyline and most importantly it's free 😉 what more can u ask so go ahead give it try u would be hooked [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]and keep up the good work author
The story is quite good and the writing quality is also not bad.The only downside is that whenever the MC introduces a new game,anime or movie 2 to 3 chapters just go into introduction of game or anime or movie.Its like watching a written gameplay or written anime and movie,Because of that you would be compelled to skip quite a few chapters because those chapters have only dialogues of anime or movie.
I like the novel. I have seen the Chinese novel on which it is based, although it was a good novel, the stale Chinese vision of how the world "works" was quite noticeable. This novel, on the other hand, does not have those problems, which, IN MY OPINION, makes it better. Although it is also true that it is weak in some parts, If anyone has seen the novel "This is not a Galgame", they will have seen how it at least tries to innovate in the method of plot advancement. First of all, when trying to bring video games from future times, sometimes you are filled with optimism and the game fails because it fails to adapt to the fashions of that time. Secondly, he usually takes his time in developing the different stages of video games, he is currently entering 3D games and it is clear that he knows the subject and the limitations. Third is that it gives a lot of prominence to the developers and shows how the same game can change depending on who makes it. This novel is good and on the right track, but I hope it doesn't fail in the same ways as the novel on which it is based. Don't rush from generation to generation and from console to console, in a hurry because in the end you will miss some cool games that came out. Furthermore, I would like it to also make its own games, bring together talented people and create games that never existed in our reality. Let it not simply be the character saying what they have to do and the rest of the employees obeying without giving an opinion. Create a company like Capcom in the beginning, PopCap games or Valve.
Es buena, sin trampas especiales además de su propio conocimiento y entre más la lees más te atrapa la historia de este futuro magnate de los videojuegos,en conclusión me encanta la historia ,lo diferente que queda de la mtl también es un factor positivo que no me desagrada en absoluto ,sigue con el buen desarrollo de personajes ,gracias por esta creación de la literatura autor san y a esas personas que no le gusten está historia desafían la muerte al no conocer el monte tai
I binge the whole story in three days. about 400 chapters, and I can say for certain that this is one of my favorite rags to riches fic, the fact that the writing is immersing and engaging. nothing is boring, and while I'd love to have a more depth or quantity of chapters regarding the impact of specific games/technologies, I could understand that you'd want to have a faster pace.