Yue_021
"A reader lives a thousand lives before he dies. The man who never reads lives only one." Fav Genres: Vanilla Romance, Slice of Life, Fantasy Dislikes: Tragic Romance, Bad Ending, Milfs, NTR, BDSM
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Yue_0212mthCommentedCh 152 Chapter 152: Chase is the Honored brother- Yue_0213mthPosted
- Yue_0213mthCommentedCh 133 Chapter 133: Kevin's Solicitation, Mei's Choice
- Yue_0213mthPosted
The writing quality is absolutely great. I can't stress enough just how good the writing quality is. The author was also able to easily bring out emotions of the characters and convey it to the readers. I really teared up in some of the emotional parts of the story. Though the plot is ok and could have some improvements, but if the author is able to do this and combine it with this quality of writing, I have no doubts you would succeed.
- Yue_0213mthCommentedCh 132 Chapter 132: Sirin, whose home was stolen, and Mei lets Kiana go, can't go back anymore
- Yue_0213mthCommentedCh 127 Chapter 127: The Void Archives
- Yue_0213mthCommentedCh 117 Chapter 117: My Friend, You Are a True Friend
- Yue_0213mthCommentedCh 115 Chapter 115: Since It Has Come to This, Let's Eat First
- Yue_0213mthPosted
Binged around 150 Chaps all night before stopping. It was very good at first but then the plot becomes repetitive and the pacing became too fast which robbed that good experience I felt in the early chaps.If I have if honest I truly enjoyed the so called 'filler' slife of life chapters you stopped making after a certain point, its gives depth to the character and could have been another plot point to avoid the repetitiveness of the business side. Like you could have explored Mira's life in college and how her relationship with the mc impacted her life there. The reactions of the classmates? How did the treatment of her change when he donated a sum of money to the school? Perhaps you can have some male student attempt to 'flirt' her and how she rejects it and then follwed by the mc showing him that she is his. There is a lot of aspects in his relationship with not only with Mira but also her parents, her sister, his sisters, and etc. There's a lot of plotpoint that could have been explored. These things had a lot of potential that would give depth to your characters. Making them more relatable and easy to sympathize with. But we barely get any of it and then at certain point completely stopped it.There also the problem where you repeatedly told a scene instead of showing it. Like they said "Show not Tell". You did it right with the buying of the marriage ring. You showed us, instead of just saying "He bought an elegant ring" and leave it at that.I believe it was a bad move when you stopped making the so called 'filler' slice-of-slife chaps after the marriage chapter. Those where the things that I enjoyed and helped avoid the reptitiveness of the business side. So much potential but was not explored.Hope this helps you improve author. I geniunely enjoyed reading this book.
- Yue_0213mthCommentedCh 113 Chapter 113: Heaven-sent? Childhood Sweetheart?!
- Yue_0213mthCommentedCh 112 Chapter 112: Strange World, the Herrscher Appears Only Once
- Yue_0214mthReplied to Veasna_TDM
- Yue_0214mthCommentedCh 94 Continuing The Search
- Yue_0217mthCommentedCh 225 Pleasure Before the Great Invasion (R18)
- Yue_0217mthCommentedCh 219 A Taste of Modern Artillery Bombardment
- Yue_0217mthCommented[Muteki no egao de arasu media♫
- Yue_0218mthCommentedCh 33 Chapter 33: Become My Plaything