so I kind of like your story but I dislike the main character. I'm not sure what his future plan is? I thought maybe after kingpin he will stop killing but is he planned to be a serial killer all his life?
if so maybe a character change is necessary at this point now
if he is just going to be so clinical in his association with people in order to power up he isn't going to be a happy character and readers are going to slowly dislike the mc
This fanfic is really cool, I would like to see more of the relationship between Gwen and the MC. This fanfic rekindled my crush I had on blonde Emma Stone. (Google translator)