Well, its an interesting idea...... and that's it. U say Obito's power, but there's only the fire style and sharingan, well u could say its just the beginning and there will be more, but things simply don't add up. As a teenager Obito posed a challenge to the Fourth Hokage. As an adult, he defeated Root's most skilled ninja, and simultaneously held his own against Konoha's top shinobi and Killer B. Obito was proficient in taijutsu as he fought on par with Kakashi on several occasions, while controlling the outcome of their last fight. His physical strength and speed were great enough to lift Konan by her throat with one hand while gravely injured, impale someone by running his arm through their chest, and keep up with Naruto's Nine-Tails Chakra Mode, but can't kill a Monster on the first floor without a weapon ? Getting stronger ? I would say, that he is already the strongest adventurer out there and yet u fail to portray him as such. In addition to that I have to say, that the grammar here is pretty bad. There is simply no conjugation in here. I simply can't understand why u would write a story in English when u apparently fail to use it appropriately. Everything would be better with better grammar, I mean almost everything mentioned above is still easily changeable and not really that bad and could be enjoyable, but the grammar really ruins it all. Missing conjugation is something that I can't overlook and the lack of it disturbs the reading flow. Well overall its a 1.4
