Hello, I'm the author here and I try to make a review for my story. It's not a good review, but who knows if someone wants to know about the brain fog effect in my glasses :
1. The MC's name is Oxy Jane, a unique name right? Oxy is a nerd girl who has no friends at school. Not a fun kid, but a bit caring, and likes to do anything she wants without knowing whether she can do it or not. Oxy's superpower ability doesn't seem useful in this story at the beginning (but her superpower will be useful later).
2. Using a world-building, located in a city called "Skeleta" which can be called the real world like our place. There is also a dimension that can be entered through dreams. I don't know if it makes sense but I'm trying to make it easy to understand.
3. The problem of the brain fog effect is a bit confusing whether it is called a phenomenon, a disease, or a serial killer.
4. The story is a bit slow. Until chapter 10, Oxy had only just met Helio, the four children who were have superpowers were not yet known. This story also shows how the process Oxy finds the other children.
5. English is not my language but I try my best to write well. And for those who have time to correct my language, just please, I will be very grateful. (But please do it nicely because I am... a sensitive person, sorry, haha)
I hope you enjoy my work. Just give it a try, who knows you might be interested.
Thank you, ❤️
