Comments of chapter undefined of A Hentai System in the World of Dungeon Ni Deai
A Hentai System in the World of Dungeon Ni Deai
ParodyGirl
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Hmm I think the mistake was not presenting the story you wanted well, if you want a villainous mc and you say so, people will accept the actions that we like, because we understand that the mc will be a villain who goes against morals. But if what you want is just someone smart, the best thing would be to put intelligent situations that justify that he always gets what he wants and in the same way give him more plots thanks to his intelligent actions. Example, you want freya to be against him, because the mc knows his plans, make him block or avoid them, frustrating freya and having a fight in the shadows, creating dark and intelligent fight plots between them. You want a way for her to have a chance with hestia, justify the goddess losing her love for bell, for her to understand through scenarios that bell didn't love her romantically. Manipulate people in a practical way, justifying actions so that most of your audience accepts them. Or explain your story from the beginning, remember that it is yours, the readers do not matter because if you only rely on them, you will never please them. Focus on the type of story you want because if not you will lose your interest and leave it. In turn, don't feel bad if you start losing a lot of readers because that will be your story. But in the end it's your story
Haaaa I guess I expected too much and is in my fantasy, as I have always read a lot of VILLAINOUS MC and I am a fan of that concept because When the MC is not ruthless, intelligent, ect, also because it makes hateful to see an MC making male friends or having a sisterhood friendship because I am already used to the MC being the best, I do not like it when they underestimate the MC or when it is a dog licking to please the girls
although with that chapter I was interested xD(since it would be interesting to see how you handle everything that happens by making quick decisions, it would be something real that would happen to anyone who has an interest in the girl and sees that he has the opportunity to get rid of the competition, and it would have been a new beginning of a villain protagonist who does whatever it takes to get what he wants). * Now that you've changed it, it's sure to be the same as many fanfics that become boring after a certain point in the story (although if you know how to play the plot well, something interesting may come out of it). * And if you wanted a natural death, it would have been an excuse (because of the appearance of the protagonist there was a change, like a butterfly effect, where "Bell cranel" is seriously injured and "Bell cranel" helps the protagonist to save himself, making it an accident of the dungeon). * there are many ways to make it natural by adding , the butterfly effect plot.
the author in your fanfic 2 is a very big problem. 1 I am a system, or rather the status, try to write it more often, and also what about the card? 2- strength gg that with him his strength is not at all clear. is he weak or strong what is his real level? what characteristics are they displayed on the back or is it just a status?
un poco mejor domo dije no es necesario matar pero si es posible déjalo medio muerto como dije bell no tiene sentimiento de amo Hestia y cuanto las rubia espadachín los admira como ídolo y por ciento no te dejo los lentores solo tiene una queja pero eso te ayuda mejora tu historia y gracia por Cap. [img=recommend]
