The First Demon Diablo

You can ask me questions about my story here. I will make a real review about my own story when enough chapters got released. I also accept your ideas or suggestions for making my story better. Please criticise me with constructive explanations so that I can learn something out of it and make my story better, thank you!

no need to explain if you liked custom made demon king you will love this story and for those who have not seen demon king go see it it's an incredible novel now to come back to this novel we will follow a demon in several worlds for him to become a future demon god for fans of multiverse and demon novels do not hesitate to watch

This novel requires so much creation and the Author did just that, however I wanted to give this book an honest but I guess this review is also honest. The Author did such a great job in jotting this down and this is amazing work great job even though it has a few chapters it's still a great one and a great start.

you know what's lacking !! Moreee chapters .......Many moreee!!.... ................,................,...............................,................,

I like how your setting up thing so far. It's nice that you even commented pictures of important images to help us visualize the picture your painting. My recommendation would be to try to add more content per chapter in the future. They've been pretty short and bite-sized so far since their set-up chapters so its fine for now, just keep it mind that in the future you can write chapters in more detail (just don't go overboard). Good luck, thanks for the cool read!

Hello ghost are you actually coming back ive been waiting for your book to come back i really wanna follow along your MC journey i just wanna know if this is dropped also i hope your doing good man

Heyo, It's me Goose God. ~Writing Quality~ Pretty decent, already better than 90% of Authors. But nothing special. There were a few grammars mistakes, but they weren't Devil Slave System level, so I can tolerate it. ~Stability of Updates~ Better than my old fics, So I guess that's a plus? ~Story Development~ Honestly, pretty good. But I've noticed that most chaps are like... Nothing burgers, which are essential for any novel, but kinda bad when you don't upload frequently. Though I guess I can't judge since most of So, I'm a Dragon, What of it? is just filler. But I worded it out like it seems important. ~Character Design~ Immaculate, no need for discussion. ~World Background~ Inspired by Custom Made Demon King, I will assume it works like in that novel. Has potential if you have drive. Stop answering the reader's question in the actual book, answer it in the comments or something. No need for a long exposition, just have the characters themselves GRADUALLY discover it. Stop using the System as a way to convey info, that's boring and feels unearnt. But honestly? Really good, brother. I'm kinda inspired to make an Angel novel based on CMDK after this.

amazing novel and author who is immortal............

If you want a new novel like custom made demon king this is the best for you so enjoyed it man.

I am going to read this book since I was in love with custom mad demon King but I really hope you keep updating this unlike the other guy who I wish the best of luck to and I hope you put things like devil fruits just things from other Mangas that's all thank you and have a good day 😊

Welp, now I'm writing a review just for this story. Here are my thoughts:Writing Quality: I see this as it speaks about grammar mistakes and the author's style. First, let's talk about the grammar. The grammar in this story is exceptionally good for WebNovel standards. If you know WebNovel, then you also know that in literally every paragraph, there is a grammar mistake. Actually, now it would be 5 stars, but as I already said, this category also has the writing style... just to clarify, it's in the later chapters, and not in the beginning, but as of right now, the style is... not good. I'm sorry to say it like that, but it's the truth for me. Sorry, 2 stars.Story Development: There aren't that many chapters, so I can't say a lot about it right now. But sometimes, I wonder what will happen when the MC gets strong. Don't get me wrong, a lot of stories are about just powering up the MCs, and in the end, they drop it because there's no goal. So I really want to know that, but the other things are still good. 4 stars.Character Design: 5 stars. You can't talk about this a lot, but as of the currently available chapters, it's good. You can also see the characters' thought process and development.Updating Stability: I'm sorry, 1 star. I know you broke your leg, and that's why there were no chapters for 1 year. But then you got sick again and didn't post anything for another week. Right now, you aren't even posting any chapters for your story anymore. The last time was 16 days ago.World Background: 3 stars. I noticed a lot of similarities with CMDK material, as I'm currently reading a CMDK FanFic. But it's still good Overall: 3 stars. Not bad. Most of my seriously reviewed stories get about 1-2 stars as they are completely rubbish, but this story is not complete rubbish. However, I still decided to quit this story as I'm not a fan of the writing style. I hope you have a good time as an author. Goodbye!

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