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the story is ok, you should improve the grammar and the header a bit..............................................................................
I get your doing this for free and writings your hobby, but the English is jumbled at best and incoherent at worst. Maybe try using a program like grammarly and when you rewrite a chapter go over every sentence and ask yourself does this make sense? If I was an English teacher you would have gotten a d-, the only thing stopping the F is you tried In the first place
If you couldn't tell from the synopsis, the grammar is atrocious .
story started out good and interesting, but around chapter 10 the grammar degraded to that of a 8th graders.. with the characters constantly talking in the 3rd person.. (like riser phenex from dxd).. basically just constantly saying their own names as well as the persons they're talking to.. it is irritating and starts giving one migraines the more you try to follow along..
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