modestbaddie
This author has the ability to come up with compelling storylines that almost force one to keep reading their work. Their love for writing is evident throughout the novel thus far, as is the reason for my five-star rating. The writer would do well to stabilise their audience more; create a consistent atmosphere within their novel (This can be done by building an emotion within yourself before you begin writing your chapter and keeping to the ambience of that emotion as you construct your story. Avoid switching from formal to informal narration to give your writing a more experienced feel.) Furthermore, synonyms are the spice of life. There are so many ways to says beautiful: gorgeous, magnificent, ephemeral, stunning, apple of the eye. By adding more flavours to the dish of your writing, you could escalate it to greater levels. All the best!
That was a great start dear Jakkanim. The start was bit common but the main game starts from the second chapter. I like the FL because she is funny instead of strong after the next chance and blah blah type FLs. I would love to see more mocking moments between ML and FL. Those minor grammar mistakes could be easily corrected so there is no issue. Overall the story has great potential and waiting for more updates.
Ok, here is my review as of CH 6. Very interesting story. Character Design is decent, and I love the modern incorporations. Seeing the MC's likes and thoughts being relatable is 100% a plus! Some statements really stick with me so great job! Now, the major issue is the grammar. As other reviewers have most likely stated, Grammarly is your best friend. (It is trust me. I'm not the best at grammar but Grammarly is always on for me. This review was written with Grammarly haha!) I'm sure that you will improve and this story certainly has potential. Go Go go! Good luck!