Comments of chapter undefined of A Defective Cog(Haitus)

Hey man, I read through your story and I liked the direction it was going. I'm looking forward to how your M.C develops and uses his cool (strange) power choice. If I were to offer a point of improvement, it would be in the fluidity of the text. I found it a bit informal and hard to get into with how direct the sentences were. Of course, if that's what you're going for, then please ignore this. Please add another chapter soon!! :)