Comments of chapter undefined of Behind the Veil : Vengeful Spirit
Behind the Veil : Vengeful Spirit
nia94
Chapter comments7
Hello, I read through your first 4 chapters and I'm quite pleased. Your world building, storyline and prologue are excellent. Compared to some of the other works I've read, I can tell that you plan and are a good writer. The only criticism that I can give you is that there are times where your syntax and verbs are a little messed up. For example, there should be times where words should be switched around like "forever loner" should be "loner forever" which are common mistakes. There are also times where you switch between present tense verbs and past tense in the same paragraph making the reading seem a little off. However! These are the only issues I had with the text and I found that the rest was very good. Please continue writing because you are definitely getting somewhere with this story! :)
Don't let it get to you. I know that English is a hard language to master especially for writing because of all the unspoken rules. I'm unsure if you're first language is English but I saw that you did try hard to write without mistakes. I hope you write more and give me a good story to read. I'll be waiting for each new chapter
nia_94:thank you. i used grammarly to lessen my mistakes but i think i should tried harder. thanks for the honest review.
I usually read at night and I'm glad I read your story in the morning because the description of everything is on point. It's like I am also inside your story and can see all of the characters.
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