The story is typical, which is good. The plot, I can predict, but enjoyable I guess? This is good for teenagers, to give them flutters and stuff. An honest critique, speech, and paragraphs need a little bit more creativity and grammar needs a little bit of fixing too. But it isn't really bad. It's as good as great.
But I guess it was happening fast? In less than three chapters, there were already some exciting scenes. Anyways, maybe it was purposely done like that. I can recommend it to early adolescents, surely.