SkyrecLeftya
Going to have an attempt on a system-based novel. If there is a clear interest for this novel I will start to pursue daily release of chapters if that is the case. Else enjoy for now! Have a couple of things in mind in store for this one. Therefore I hope you enjoy the story foremost, and the grammar/writing will improve overtime as I will gain more experience as an author. If you like the novel so far/think it might be interesting, please leave a comment or show your support. Any positive feedback drives my writing lust forward.
The story has grammatical errors all over the place, character is a cookie-cut basic system holder. Description could use some work, you're trying paint a picture with too little paint. The story so far is try gloss over and detail events to the point I'm not sure what's going on. The story has a good update speed but I'd prefer if the author got an editor to go through the chapters and revise them to improve the simpler mistakes. The author has spoken of the story's main problem yes, but the world of the Mc or their perspective of the world could be further shown. My only question is why use 'gritted teeth' or 'gritted their teeth' for when the characters smile or grin? Gritted implies strain against two objects so the characters sound like their in pain or angered to the point of frustration.