I haven't gone too far in the novel so my review may change later on.
After reading the review of Jasonenrick, you did alright. The story seems like it's good so far but the view you're giving us is an "eh" Also your grammar lowkey sucks. For instance, punctuation. You seem like you don't really know when to use them and your spelling is sometimes off too.
I suggest you download Grammarly as it should help you out with punctuation and spelling or get an editor. If you need an editor, I can always help :)