Monkey_Godking
I honestly wish I could’ve made this a four star but the 3.8 is my actual rating on the topic of story quality and not just some feelings getting ahead of my actions. While I’m not a big fan of your previous works and don’t generally enjoy fast paced story telling, I do believe this was done decently but could still use some work. Fast paced story telling requires a foundation in order to be successful, that foundation being the world building. If the world isn’t interesting enough to draw people in, then going fast is just a quick way to screw your story over big time. Going fast already limits most of what you could do in a slow paced story, such as actual character development readers can be invested in, and extra little details that make your characters just feel more fleshed out instead of cardboard cutouts that only say a simple variation of things pre recorded. But since this is One Piece and most of the world is already built for you, you going fast doesn’t screw you over as much as it should have, which is why 'World Building' is a 3 instead of the 1-2 it should’ve gotten. But sadly that doesn’t completely stop the damage. I enjoy the story very much and look forward to updates, but I’m gonna have to say I won’t be expecting much from it other than a quick but somewhat interesting read. I wish you good luck if you’ve actually read all of that, if you haven’t, well whatever.
its meh like I was really invested in the MCxNami ship but then the author bombed it to all all but saying that he sees Nami as a sister while its clear she has a huge crush on him and then theres the overarching part of him just manipulating everything for no real or clear goal so it just feels weird and theres a lot of foreshadowing but none of its happened whitch kills the suspence after like 10 chapters and what not overall its a meh novel not the best but also not the worst
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Really enjoy this one from beginning to end. Very good comedy and Characters. The MC is funny and seems ´real´, and the story which progresses parallel to the straw hats voyage is interesting and original. My only minus is how the love interests in the story were handled. Up to the first third of the novel everything was pointing at Nami, with her admitting her feelings, and MC after several private breakdowns and his own development as a person slowly accepting his own feeling. It seemed genuine and good... until it suddenly ended and he says he sees her as a sister. No explanation, no build up, no climax or fall apart. MC woes another Girl (bonney), and gets together with her. Now dont get me wrong. The story and build up between MC and Bonny is also exteremely well written, and really wolesome so i personally got over, and even liked it. But considering everything with Nami, it felt a little incostistent especially with how the two of them remained after he brought bonny to the straw hats. I never read the novel before it was remastered so i could live with it but i also can understand why so many people rant over it. I STRONGLY recommend this one to anyone. Top notch Comedy, Romance, Originality and Character writing
This is personally one of the best Fan-fictions I ever read. Also overall one of the first that I read through and I can tell you that I cried more and harder than the previous twins of the sea. I got also goosebumps from the epic scenes and laughed at the funny comedy. I really loved to read this, it was a great story and I hope I can introduce it to my friends who dont even like to read novels/ Fan-fics.