Alexander_the_grey
I think you forgot to tell neville the speech about his father, should have said something akin “Neville listen to me, You are not your father, you should not try to be your father, you’re Neville, and should try to be better than he ever was, your father’s wand is important to you and to your grandmother but that is all it is, your fathers wand, it’s not yours and sadly it will never be, you need your own wand, one that not only would work better with you but one that will let you grow into being better than your father, one that would make him proud that you’re his son” or something similar to that
dude all your characters arcs feels forced. First example is Harry and MC who you tried to give the feeling of big/little brother between but to me, it felt like the MC trying to force himeslef into Harry's life. Second, in these last few chapters, MC is telling everybody who listens about his backstory and shit and try to make everyone feel sad for him. At least, that's what I felt.