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This story does have potential. But there are some problems that I find. If the author reads these hopefully he can answer some of my question that I have. For the record I am caught up to the latest chapter and will continue reading for sure. For the Writing Quality theres alot of grammatical errors and misspelled words that do need to be fixed. English might not be their first language and that's totally cool but theres alot that need to be updated. Story Development is interesting but it feels like a train with no brakes. Very fast paced. This isn't a bad thing but keep in mind that your Character Development bbn and World Building could suffer from the pace your setting. You arent even 100 Chapters in and it feels like he already God level. I believe the story would benefit more if there more time spent on him training his and other powers so we understand everyone's power level. This goes hand in hand with Character Design. Everyone feels flat. Secrecy is good but we know next to nothing about the MCs friend or Best Friend. Nor do we know why William is the way he is. Emma seems to be the classic soft hearted healer. She, in my opinion could be more of a personality or just different. Alice is also very flat so far. Is she suppose to be a companion? is she just a glorified assistant? I have a feeling that she could be so much more, such as taking the initiative and using her animal forms. The MC himself also need a bit more design. Especially when is comes to his background and the World background in general. What happened to his parents and family? What is his motivation to obtain power? What about him makes him be worthy to obtain a Pure Soul? Not to mention this Acedemy. Is it special? How is the MC able to go to a Acedemy even though hes an orphan? The back ground need a lot more fleshing out. Such as the the Countries on Earth. What is the Federation? What's the big deal about the 5 Great Families? What's society and the Government like? What role does the Association play in the Government? Where is the setting of the story? US? Europe? Asia? Or because of how the Calamities changed the landscape, is there even any old Governments left? I feel like so far that the story is sprinting on and not pausing the look at the scenery.
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First of all, I would like to congrat the author for all the update and the writing quality. There isn't too much repeating and the reading is fluid. However I must say that I found the character design of All the characters without any exception absolutely tasteless , you can say that I'm quite harsh but it's the truth, there is no surprise or depth in any character. Then I find that this story is quite quick because I think the "Cultivation " system is extremely simple and make you wonder why all the world is at tier 4 or more, because it's extremely quick to advance and the fight don't seem difficult, you don't feel any struggle from the protagonist . Then I think come the weakest spot of this novel, the World background. I feel everything in the World revolve around the MC that, without him the rest of the World would be boring, we know 2 of the 5 great families from the start and they don't seem important at all, and the rest is blur. The problem is that you can't enter in the World of the author because nothing is explained, you feel left out. Those are the major lines of my criticism, if you read, you might feel them, omnipresent, behind what is described. That's why I don't feel confortable when reading this novel. There is room for improvement and potential. Now we only need the author to exploit this potential.
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