Comments of chapter undefined of Primordial Darkness Heretic Art

you need an editor.. but okay so far..

I think it's a pretty good start though I wish we learnt more about the mc as all we got really is that he's bloodthirsty and he's adaptable in all situations

The story idea is okay but your writing is trash.

good start

Interesting...

Good start. I look forward to it.

You really flipflopped between tenses in this chapter didnt you? Past, present, and future, not a single one being missed. This is the majority of the reason why the chapter felt weird to read, the remainder was just misspelling or using verbs when you shouldve used nouns and other queer mistakes.

Yeesh, the story has potential but everything else makes it hard to read

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I think this "black light" would be black with an extremly small white outline.

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