i remember the guide on writing says...."Telling in a long paragraph with few dialogue ...theres always that danger of losing the readers attention. "
But the making of a great concept is there. Lets see more....
Awesome chappy! Nevertheless, May I kindly suggest to kinda declutter or minimized long paragraphs. I love the story but reading without pause somehow makes it quite difficult to understand the thought. Write more gonna add it on my list.
