My stories were not personal experiences but rather a result of a creative process. I want to be mysterious as possible. That is the goal.
The historical description is well researched, even the weather, or book authors cited with lists. This may be off putting to some considering that most reader want the first three chapters as engaging as possible. But this maybe the author's narrative style, even the use of words, and flow of sentences. But as you go along, the conflict is slowly revealed from among the characters, with lots of dialogue and this may be intentional to keep reader glued. Nice book. Keep it up!
interesting historical facts
An is repetitive....An only child of her parents.
This is about a novel within a novel which makes me think maybe the inside novel being referred to is not "shitty" as the narrator suggests but more exciting in my opinion because why would the author tell it? and tell in his POV. Anyways, each writer has his own style, originality, point of view and this novel has lots of check points on that. But this has gained a lot of hits and more popular that I thought. Go ahead this is a good premise and would attract fans of this genre. I am more into dialogue intensive novels but you will certainly gain a lot of fans from this game world system genre as this is the current trend. Thanks and have fun!
try inserting.....who this woman might be -- its kind of complicated--
in is bed to...in his bed...
try removing "it started" ....with the waking up of Kukorami Tatsurou.
Too many commas in above parapgraph and the sentences in most paragraph does not end. You might have overlooked this.
The opening story was strong and the first few paragraphs were written with great thoughts to get the reader attention. The style is there and the way the story was told from human to vampire and then later as a wanderer is engaging. Reminds me of twilight. Vampire, werewolves and zombies were potent mix for good stories.
Thank you for the reviews. This work is a labor of love and you are most welcome to add your own review. The stories here are purely original, crime, scifi, thriller with a twist on the supernatural borne out of frustrations and lack of diversity in writing platforms. Sorry, I dont copy other works although I am inspired by creative movie directors and their film masterworks. My self review of my work is to encourage others to dive in and see what you learn from the experience in reading this book. Thank you and god bless!