Constructive criticism: if you're worried about triggering people you can do one of several things:
- provide trigger warnings either before or in chapter
- avoid describing the events from the view of the victim
- avoid showing the event in process, show a before/after series
That's all
hmmm the chars are good as thir are but makeing hina an actual funtary would be grate. since it is a 4 way love fest mabey make them all futnarys. that be a way to go
tell the story you want to tell
there will always be comments like, 'i would done this instead' or 'why couldn't this character di such and such'
be true to your imagination and show us your story, we readers are just here for the journey
Well, I, for one, am excited.
Also for the fact I hope my cameo comes soon as we had discussed previously ùwú. You mentioned you might put it while they're traveling Underland.