Comments of chapter undefined of Supremacy Games
Supremacy Games
MidGard
Chapter comments21
I'm getting annoyed by these constant interlude chapters. it's my belief that every chapter should get something done, make some progress, raise tension or introduce something important. chapters 132 and 133 introduce a character we don't care about and immediately present her in a negative light by showing her attitude and incompetence chapters 134 and 135 essentially boil down to landlord extorting the previous character. It's like three chapters are only ment to show his ruthlessness and resistance to charm. chapter 136 shows us popular dude becoming an enemy even more. chapters 137 138 and 139 show us a side character fighting. we are given information about her family, mentality and abilities. what does this mean? you've spent significant time fleshing out side characters. this isn't necessarily bad, but you do it in a slow, drawn out manner as if we were watching the mc. what you must realize when writing side characters is that 90% of the readers don't care about them in the slightest. this means that whatever happens better be darn important. for charm lady, you've spent four chapters introducing a new character as incompetent and bratty. with such a big investment, I expect her to become a major obstacle where the importance of these chapters become clear. 136 was fine, it was intriguing and showed popular dude being set up as minor villain. the most recent 3 chapters went into great depth on bird call's fight. I like bird calls, I find her character unique and her story intriguing, but even i think 3 chapters is too much. again, you're writing her fights with mc level detail while giving lots of exposition about her family. with such luxurious treatment, heck, I expect an entire arc with her as a important character or as a recurring side character. heck, at this point I wouldn't be surprised if the next arc is landlord stealing her from her unpleasant family and forming a team with her(while charm lady looks on and sends annoying minions in the background). in conclusion, before you write a chapter think these three things: what happens in this chapter, how much detail does this event need to be written in(and which parts don't need to be written at all), and how will this chapter change reader expectations (or how will i use this information in the future). you've spent 8 chapters on side characters. I expect great things from them and you.
