Monkey_Godking
Hmmm the character is very childish and during the first chapters he is an incarnate person how to behave like a stupid child. As if you put that he is embodied only to attract those who like reincarnation and these stories because it appears as an original character growing in the world and not a person so transgenic
The heck with this story....... It's like author is waiting anything he wants. First our MC's hight is too short and he tells future to garp from the beginning and he believes, it like hell he would and our mc planning to live marine and garp is like ok use as much resources you like get strong and betray marine.
What should I say? The story started good, until the skypiea arc. It goes from good to extremely bad. I know the author try too much to make the MC develop but the result of it became extremely bad. Also...also...also... There was too much BS when the skypiea arc and after that...Sorry author, you really started good but then sigh~, buy everyone try to read and if it fits to your taste try it.
This is one of the best fan fics I have come across I donβt know why I see all the hate people are too quick to judge I think that everything that happens is really good so far he is a little weak rem currently chapter 27 but Iβm sure he will get stronger but this one piece fan fic is my favorite that I have come across and he only told the person he is in love with that he reincarnated besides merry who knows everything. One thing I could say is more merry because those interactions are funny. But honestly donβt see why people hate it I donβt see a problem with an mc struggling every once in awhile.
I really enjoyed this book it's funny, unique, and the romance it's pretty good. I also feel like the way you portrayed the characters is pretty accurate and also how they develop through the story. Overall I think your story is really good. Don't take the other bad comments to heart theirs always haters, and won't be able to please everyone. Your story is good as it is so far(made it to ch27), and I'm not the only one who thinks that base on your power ranking.
The only problems I can think of are; the grammar, and how things like excitement aren't expressed very well. Other than that it's a really good story, I just hope the author won't stop writing it, because I remember reading a naruto fanfic that updated twice a day but it stopped after like 150 chapters.
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