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Potato_AimLv44yr
2020-07-23 09:51

The only problems I can think of are; the grammar, and how things like excitement aren't expressed very well. Other than that it's a really good story, I just hope the author won't stop writing it, because I remember reading a naruto fanfic that updated twice a day but it stopped after like 150 chapters.

Twins of the Sea

Monkey_Godking
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QTi
QTiLv3

Hmmm the character is very childish and during the first chapters he is an incarnate person how to behave like a stupid child. As if you put that he is embodied only to attract those who like reincarnation and these stories because it appears as an original character growing in the world and not a person so transgenic

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Rudranarayan_Nanda
Rudranarayan_NandaLv3

The heck with this story....... It's like author is waiting anything he wants. First our MC's hight is too short and he tells future to garp from the beginning and he believes, it like hell he would and our mc planning to live marine and garp is like ok use as much resources you like get strong and betray marine.

4yr
WTFman
WTFmanLv5

Reveal spoiler

4yr
QueroV
QueroVLv14

What should I say? The story started good, until the skypiea arc. It goes from good to extremely bad. I know the author try too much to make the MC develop but the result of it became extremely bad. Also...also...also... There was too much BS when the skypiea arc and after that...Sorry author, you really started good but then sigh~, buy everyone try to read and if it fits to your taste try it.

4yr
JackbladesFF7
JackbladesFF7Lv3

This is one of the best fan fics I have come across I don’t know why I see all the hate people are too quick to judge I think that everything that happens is really good so far he is a little weak rem currently chapter 27 but I’m sure he will get stronger but this one piece fan fic is my favorite that I have come across and he only told the person he is in love with that he reincarnated besides merry who knows everything. One thing I could say is more merry because those interactions are funny. But honestly don’t see why people hate it I don’t see a problem with an mc struggling every once in awhile.

4yr
peter_spindler
peter_spindlerLv13

Don't really know what to say? I'm only 6 chapters in, but it's enjoyable and that's it really. Mc is a cool guy, he seems real laid back which is nice.

4yr
Tamash1
Tamash1Lv13

Reveal spoiler

4yr
ChronoDragon
ChronoDragonLv4

Honestly this book is one of my favorite it really good and the story has developed nicely and the mc is a good mc and the love interests is good

4yr
Fallen999
Fallen999Lv15

I really enjoyed this book it's funny, unique, and the romance it's pretty good. I also feel like the way you portrayed the characters is pretty accurate and also how they develop through the story. Overall I think your story is really good. Don't take the other bad comments to heart theirs always haters, and won't be able to please everyone. Your story is good as it is so far(made it to ch27), and I'm not the only one who thinks that base on your power ranking.

4yr
ROW
ROWLv5

I really like this book, it's pretty funny and interesting. MC interaction is hilarious. While the storyline is almost the same (as of this day) it doesn't feel like copy paste from original and refreshing.

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