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Mc is a complete moron and keeps messing up with his acting and things he says but SOMEHOW other characters are oblivious idk mc is just a complete moron and Iβm not a fan of OCs in dragon ball fanfics since there are sooooooo many characters so why add more saiyans even a female saiyan since itβll just make a bad story even worse
Hah, so launch has been thoroughly used by mr.roshi in this fic as well, pity though for a fic that has a har*m tag on it, might as well add N T R tag. Mc is just a tiny bit smarter than goku, you should just have to make him find the dragon ball again and wish for self-taught martial arts instead of learning from the perv*rt roshi who might hide the real secret technique in martial arts, sigh, fics these days can't really be creative
Yo, I am going to post another Review to address some things. The main thing is the bad reviews that have a lot of likes. I am not going to delete them, I think that would be counter-intuitive of me trying to learn as an author. There are going to be bad readers and there are bad authors. This isn't the best fan-fic and it's going to follow canon kinda tight until later on. Most of the bad reviews are by people who haven't read a lot of the chapters so it would be greatly appreciated if you read most of it before reviewing. Those are the reviews that I take seriously and help me grow as an Author. Thanks!
Okay I have read until last update (chapter 60) before I decided to drop the story....the plot is decent , the reading is relatively entertaining and the writing style is better than most (this is why I didn't put a 1 star review despite what forced me to drop the story) so I could overlook some things I didn't like plot wise in the beginning of the story (like forcefully slowing down the Mc progress in bullshit ways to avoid him getting strong too quickly; twisting the plot to force not so much the harem route but adding other women in the pairing outside of bulma and chichi who [chichi and bulma] somewhat could be paired with this mc in a kinda natural way since even in Canon it wouldn't have been far fetched ) but then this chapter came and while I could skip it and any similar chapter it would still reduce my enjoyment of reading this story so this is why I decided to drop this work..at first I didn't plan for a review but I think it is fair for all the people who share my lack of appreciation for a few things to give a fair warning that isn't present in the plot summary : there is FUTA just introduced in chapter 60 and while maybe the author and anyone liking FUTA would probably say that it isn't a true FUTA because of the way the author introduced it ....i would be calling them liars because if the Mc not only have extra copies of his little bro grow on other women (even though it is implied mc can still feel everything from them like if they were attached to himself) but he already said there is a way for the women to feel what happen to this extra appendage attached to them ... It is FUTA no matter what and adding how it is implied it won't be a 1 time thing and that it seems a couple of the women (kale and caulifla) of the Mc are very eager for it: in particular kale who is presente as in love with caulifla and not Goku .. So under a certain pov you could say you have a pseudo NTR So I have said everything I wanted to say in particular the warning for everyone who don't like FUTA ...and author while I thank you for your work and what was an enjoyable reading for me until c59 ... I still repeat what I wrote in the comment of chapter 60 : FUTA is one of the thing that you must tag explicitly to make aware your readers .... In the future don't forget to give warning about delicate and controversial tags [ for me controversial tags are things like not only FUTA but even Ntr, ****** and the likes] if you plan (I don't know if you have the idea of writing in a more "professional/lucrative" way or not ) to keep writing and maybe even gaining something from your writing remeber to add warning for things like that I rember a sort of cultivation novel that went premium and suddenly without any warning it became full of FUTA and Ntr and the author didn't give a warning to avoid losing potentials readers....a dick move since after that scammy stunt I am among the people who will never even read any of his book even if he wrote something without any hint of r18 materials of any kind.
boring, bad protagonist, average story for a fic... just crap ββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββ ββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββ ββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββ ββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββ
I have dropped this story at chapter 55 story adds in so cool new ideas but I can't take the forced canon writing, author makes Goku far stronger than full power freza adds in cooler out of nowhere, next Goku cures himself of the heart virus so no future trunks no time travel but cell still shows up, if you are going to go non canon go for it don't do original content then force it back down the canon route
One of the Best dragon ball fanfic ever, can't wait to see where this story goes. And i hope it doesn't get dropped.πππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
Honestly it seems really decent compared to other stories, however whats annoying for me is the comments people don't realize that this is the author's story what we do is add feedback, give our thoughts, and have fun not some child **** like "Dumb mc" did you just ignore how cannon Goku acted in some of the series such as not stopping a universe threat(Buu) just because he wants his children to try saving the day and starting or stop allowing gohan to train in the hyperbolic time chamber in cell saga and not even doing any training to achieve ssj2 just because Gohan showed one moment of being able to do super saiyan 2 or "I'm Dropping" stop being a child and just drop silently don't be a fucking Karen and try to make a scene. P.S. I'm enjoying this Dragon Ball fanfic as there aren't many around on this app and it's fun to see what authors would think of their mc's to do in situations.