To be completly honest, I had problems keeping up with the story: to many perspective changes, too much info dump and a lot of different caracters in different places. If you combine these with the fact that the text is so compact that it looks like you are reading a brick... Well, my brain got a little ovewhelmed we could say...
Ps: I do not Intend to hate this fanfic, and I haven't read to much (just like 30 chapters) so I don't know if it gets better afterwords. So do not take these words as a discouragement for reading this book.