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You are doing a good job with this novel. Writing quality is very good. Character are finely written, especially Jawsh, the MC. Love his character. The storyline is well plotted and the worldbuilding is quite good despite being the well-known gamelit/rpg setting. As a gamelit fan myself, I recommend this book. šš
A good book. Definitely. It's a LitRPG and fans of the genre would certainly like it. If they don't it'll probably only be because of the grammar. Seriously, this story needs a MAJOR edit to correct it's grammar. But, aside from that, the story is pretty fun to read. I really like Jawsh (or Ghost) and I think the author has been able to show his personality well enough within a short frame of time. Every other character in the story is yet to be dealt with though. This isn't a complaint, just observation. One little complaint I do have though has to be about the lack of a driving force for the story. What does the MC want at the end of all of this? Does he just want to have an easy life in the game? Because that just doesn't excite me at all. If there's a goal, be it moralistic or nihilistic, that would add a drive to the story. I can understand that this is a little early for this complaint but the matter of fact is that you are writing a webnovel. If people don't feel interested within the first few chapters, they just wouldn't read past them. Regardless though, the book is pretty fun and has lots of potential. Definitely a good read!
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