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I usually do not read Teen Wolf fanfics because they always make them weird, i.e. Stiles is gay and can not do anything other then cry. However, this fanfic is actually really good not only because the chapters are really long and the characters are being pushed in different directions and I hope that you will keep the chapters going and will not screw it up. Just stay on this path and you will do fine.
I really want to like this. You know how to write. You are not the best but i woud read your style of stories. The think is you just keep overcomplicating the plot. You know how easy it i to resolve some problems so you pointlesly introduce new ones. Teen wolf is not action packed war show. It is slice of life with supernatural and mystery elements. Most authors just cant get it in their hads. Of course there should be fighting and drama but it does not have to be in every chapter. Iam droping at chapter 25 but story was ok just not for me i guess.
Overall a really good read I enjoy the book hopefully more your character is interesting and pulls people in so I’m really hoping you don’t let Peter live with all the bull**** he pulls LOL other than that I really like the book an I’ve read a lot of fanfics so far my opinion is I think the books actually Stay in one world with the character they built comes out good and comes out your own originality LOL I don’t know if I said that right but either way I hope you understand I also love the fact that you Don’t follow the canon of the TV show a lot and you break away with twist and turns sometimes I even rewatch the episode just to make sure and be like “wait did I miss this” Lml but either way what I’m trying to say is its a great book I hope to read more -God bless to all stay safe P.S: to the author if you’re reading this keep up the good work I hope to read more of your book and don’t let anybody say otherwise this is your show you run it no one else does -God bless and stay safe
it's solid nice grammar, and paragraph spacing the characters feel real for the most part, many females are attracted to him since this is a polygamous mc book so that part is unrealistic, but expected, and can also be explained by his mixture of alpha status, and kitsune species it's solid check it out