Reality Drift

Hmm, the first part of the story was too tense to be honest. The execution of isekai was too sudden for me because the situation in chapter 1 is too serious. I think it's need more polishing

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The writing quality is very good, I was surprised a few times at how nice it was. As for chapter updates, I'm afraid the author might slow down and burn out, but so far it's 3 a day, very impressive. Character design: Characters have not been fleshed out, but it's only been 3 chapters. World background is lacking as of chpt 3, please give me some fuel.

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The story is nice, can be better. Also try to rewrite the first few chapters As the flow isn't that smooth. The transition from life to accident to suicide is too quick. Give us more time to feel connected with the protagonist and his girlfriend. Write about their date. Just when they are at the most hearteary moment hit him over the head. He then wakes and panics. Describe his dread in more details. Write his walk to the bank. How he contemplates life and chooses to jump. Ultimately try to make the scenes more gripping so we can relate with the protagonist. So far the story is good, has potential, can be much better. Do check out my story too and leave a review.

too tense and fast, execution was really quick. it also needs some polishing here and there but its all good. keep it up. expexpexpexpepxpexpepxpepxpepxpepxpepxpeppxpepxpepxpepxpeppxpepxpepxpepxpe