NeoIsMyName
The story is good, a nice MC not many stupid young masters to just be slapfaced The weak points in my opinion is the description is lacking like the grading colors that is just guessing And i personally like Systems but not when it comes with a store since it kills the heart of the story and the adventures since is so easy to get itens and become op
this isnt really a good story the whole premise of the story is good the idea was a nice one and i hope someone does something like this but the story seems awful really i dont know what else to say im glad the author stuck with it at the end of the day he/she had a nice idea and made a story more than i did lol
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Characters act like the most dumb people that don't know common knowledge and have to be explained on how things work. The mc doesn't even use his system to the fullest potential he just downright forgets about it in the beginning there were a lot of opportunities to use it to gain knowledge but he doesnt, he could probably use it to idk purify the bloodlines of his beasts but doesn't, he could teach his monsters and himself new skills but doesn't.. The world Background is just fully forced down our throats not giving us time to properly store that info for later but later on most of it becomes useless. The mc acts and says he wants to be lay low, but all his actions are the opposite everything he does is the opposite, when the monsters attacked his school he killed them, when they went in the cave with the dungeon he took initiative and decided to go first, he showed off his monster in front of everyone when he get it in the school. Writing quality is horrible, the author doesn't even have an editor or even edits his work to a good degree, almost none of the characters have a nice personality apart from the main and secondary characters. This story has a lot of potential, if the author watches some videos on how to improve his writing and editing it will be amazing though that won't happen, sucks that such a good premise was written worse than it could have.
amazing idea poor execution. The character is not relatable at all and seems to not know what he is doing. Comes out as someone who does not understand how the real world works, nor does his maturity matches the character background story. world building is pretty and i love the idea. Just can hope for something similar in the future.
The theme of the story is good. But the MC is not upto my liking, he is lets say not like your usual MCs. The dude even forgets about his system all the time and needs the system fairy to remind him all the time and that's just irritating. He didn't use his system much until now, don't know why. But other than that it's good reading material. Just what I felt.