Alex_Destro
Please fix your grammar before uploading more, ALMOST unreadable at this state. 2/5 The story is ok, typical wish fulfillment.2/5 OP character and edgy personality, nothing unique though. 2/5 World background is ok. 3/5 I can give you a full fletched critic but it's 11PM and I have lectures tommorow. I hope you can understand. Also keep writing you cannot improve without practice
I love this novel. It is amazing to see the concept of "seven other personalities" in one! I can't wait to see what the future holds for them. I also hope, that as they grow together, they bond and learn to help one and other. Rather than having each personality working for their own good. Keep up the great work! I am looking forward to see how this novel goes!
Exelent work for the momet it has a badass mc but with his own problems and a good backstory a bit op but not to much. It also has a nice character development in the story but i recomend add more to secondary characters like his mother and brothers. It truly maked my be hiped up when I started to read it.
Good, story delivery quite smooth. Good starter for huge and wide plot while it kept light for reading. πππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
Your writing is beautifulβ¦ I look forward to your writing... I wish I could write like you... You write how I feel, even if I canβt express it... Your writing inspires me... I falling in love with your novel. I hope can read it every time, everywhere... I hope you writing this novel to the end... Good job and thank you for your hard working to finishing all chapter.........
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Great story, with great way of storytelling. Only minus is some gramar but that can be only get better by writing. Remember this is rewrite so there isn't that thrill of unknown yet but it will get better. So author i hope that you wont leave us hanging agin. Last time we didnt even get to see his other personalities.