Reviews of Harry Potter: Orphans Ascension

I read the original story and I have to say, this is much better. The writing quality improved dramatically, and it was decent to begin with. The story is far more detailed, and I'm looking forward to more.

TealovingSpider here. This is a review of the first chapter. (After start of rewrite) Grammaticaly is the first chapter without problems and also written in easy to follow manner (not just one giant blob of text). If the story progress or is written in similar fashion like before the rewrite it shoud be a major "go and read it" Just some things i would like to advice -dont make the MC a beta -try to not make him just a +1 of harrys group -dont make it harem or full of lemon (because this is a major sign of being written by some horny kid, i am here because i love the hp universe and have been growing up with the books and movies) -maybe let him be "adopted" by some family and include a bit of ffamiy bonding with a younger brother or sister. Right now our MC is a bit too "cold and detached" So we follow our MC which has a natural talent in mind magic? So it seems. Makes another kid into a living vegetable. (I think i didnt read what happend with the other older boy, but normally reading a mind without previous teaching or understanding leaves the other person with serious head damage. But this could just be me reading way too many hp fanfics at once) Let our MC show a bit remorse or smthg. Okay sorry for the rant like review. Hope to see many many more chapter and follow your story along with all the other great folks in the comment section. May the Tea be with you and dont let the Queen find my stash of teabags.

It's an interesting story but don't you think the main character is becoming too strong for a first year student who only recently learned about magic? More over it is happening too fast.

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This is a great story so far I’m really enjoying it I love the fact that the character has ambition I feel like a lot of fanfiction the characters are just there to be there and they don’t have a lot of self ambition and this character seems to be cunning and ambitious which I love.

This is honestly the best Harry Potter fanfic I have ever seen.. it is outstandingly made overall and I would recommend it to those who wish to read a good book.

Very good characters. I really like evilish/gray Hermione as a potential love interest, but the story seems to be dead. Out of pure curiosity, are you planning to continue at a later date? Will you never work on this again? Do you care if somebody decides to Necro/revive the book with them continuing it? But yeah I like the gray characters. Hope this isn't perma-ded

are you going to be updating again?

A Harry Potter universe that makes feel like if Tom Riddle had all the info then this is what he would of been like. A story of a boy who is truely cunning.

Think it’s a very good potter fic, with potential to be at the top... Don’t know if it will end up being dropped, hopefully not as I have really liked it so far

🌹💎 Has this been dropped? If so, that's sad since the story was good.

Good. A little minus as update seemed to be late. Keep up the work, i think it'll be an amazing story to read if you Can continue. Best of luck to You.

I'm loving it!! I hope more comes out, its one of the greatest HP fanfics I have read! .....................................................

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Alright.

Writing Quality: 5/5. Nothing to say about writing. Really excellent, especially for being a fan fiction. Stability of Updates: 4/5. Not so much for the number of chapters, they are good for the quality they offer. Too random days. I hope for some news, calendar or other to be able to understand more or less when to check the page. Don't misunderstand, it's not a fault of the work or the author, it's my fault, but I can't help it. A review is always subjective. Story Development: 4/5. Excellent development of the story. The only thing that I don't find too pleasant is the fact that the protagonist discovers too many things in a short time and I'm not talking that the protagonist becomes Op too early. He discovers places, secrets and other things in too short a time. The speed of the facts is excellent. Character Design: 5/5. I love the protagonist and also the characters that already existed in the original work. Why? Each character presented so far is perfectly described, not even the characters from the original books seem. He made these characters his own. Really well done. World Background: 3/5. Weak part of the fiction. Need to add new places. Obviously I recommend the fiction and I will continue to read it myself.

Ahhhh so many possibilities... the mc have knowledge but don’t have the power to use it.YET... and the good part is the mc is Muggleborn.. don’t change it for like a hidden inheritance... let him get it to the right of conquest like the Ravenclaw because he cleansed the diadem and the ghost of ravenclaw in the castle give him an inheritance and the Slytherin when he see a portrait of Salazar Slytherin hidden in the chamber of secrets.. And don’t forget the soul of Tom in harry’s scar.. the knowledge of tom there before he vanished...

Great chapter,i like the way that the story is heading,the only thing that is missing in my opinion is the lack of interactions and dialogs between the MC and the other students. Also,what happened to daphne and tracey?I got the impression that they would be the MC's friends but they seldom appear in the story. Anyways,can't wait for the next chapter.

Really good. Keep it up please.Really good. Keep it up please.Really good. Keep it up please.Really good. Keep it up please.Really good. Keep it up please.Really good. Keep it up please.

Love the book so far, like how you’ve made the character design for jake and how he interacts with the rest of the world and his thoughts about the world he was put into.