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1. Winter 2. Neo 3. Emerald 4. Velvet
Maybe he kidnapped L for ransom first if he owns such a big info network he probably knows about her and by bargaining with A he can exchange her life for their retreat... just a thought since it’s always weird when a author introduces a character with ties to a important character just to kill them off unless their goal was the anguish all along.
Really good so far I like his nen ability if I had to make any suggestions I’d say maybe train some advanced forms in nen once he completely masters the basics and how to apply them all to his animal forms and learn some more martial arts from netero since I believe he traveled and learned at and challenged multiple dojo’s which I think you’ll probably do both. In the future besides that maybe have him find a way to use nen to slow his aging so he can be apart of cannon in the future by applying traits of long lived animals to his body or just using nen in general. Also although he may care about the bath of zoology and not pursue money it doesn’t mean he can’t accumulate it over time and maybe eventually meet a women who shares the same interest with him that he can end up with and travel the world together discovering new things since it’s always better to share your joy and findings with someone you love maybe create a new oc just for that???
Ivy, catwomen, Harley, tala, nessa or Thalia al-ghul, raven, and power girl like the villain/ anti-hero women more maybe change them a little for the better .
any kinesis ability as their off shoots of the basic psychic powers of telekinesis and telepathy. So pyro, electro, chrono, etc. any of them work or multiple of them plus regeneration is always a good power.
Good chapter and fanfic like the details but he should have gone with a different explanation to Kurama like instead of saying he was just a aura he should have said he was both asura, naruto, and dix a mix of three souls in one body with him being a reincarnated person from another universe sent their by god and by being more upfront he could have talked more on the future and planned better for it together with Kurama. Maybe something to go back and edit if you haven’t wrote to many interactions between them were your at in the story unless you have something specific planned for the future.
Input to your first question: Mix of option 1 and 2 be one of 7 warlords but also an underworld emperor for intelligence and tech trade (nothing fancy though just small improvements) he could take Moira’s spot and ship after killing him and hogback stealing hogbacks research and maybe recruit Perona and use thriller bark as a hidden base in Florian triangle with some upgrades. Input Q 2: recruit the users if their likable or smart characters but if their useless then just take the df before them.
Love the character development and how he plans to improve himself better then his last life both mentally and physically. And it completley makes since that he learned observation haki with his advanced brain active in a sensory deprivation environment for so long if your thinking about advanced forms emotion and future sight make since if he attains them once he’s older and has more experience and interactions but not memory manipulation he’s better off achieving that via science if he even wants to at all. In short good story keep up the good work.
Keep one piece and I understand you want to keep him like the original dr. gero but after his run in with saitama his mind set changed a little for the better and believed maybe he should change and not just humanity so maybe add some character development to him and maybe instead of using just pure science and future df powers maybe have him focus on some physical training using saitamas influence on him to want a stronger body. Just some suggestions to think about...
Deadpool is that you??? Lol. That’d make a good character reference if your going for a crazy anti-hero just try not to kill other hero’s even if he’s crazy then it’d take away plot points and stories/their villains who love to fight them nothing wrong with a good spar with them though. And sprinkle in some romance and you got a good story, i mean even Deadpool’s got Vanessa and he’s way more f’d up in the head probably... I think... to early to tell.