stella2138
In my own honest opinion, the whole concept is cute. It's engaging in its own way and I actually understood where this is going. However, I cannot continue reading this no matter how good the idea was because of the way it was written. It lacks emotion and details. (though I'm no any better) but still, I advice that you work more about the quality of your chapter instead of rushing it because the premise is really good and it would be a waste if it won't improve.
this book so far quite good for me but not very interesting. it is fun to read maybe it is slow update. i hope author can update regularly. i still wait for the male character and female character to interact or growing together. i still waiting for their spark. overall, it is nice and i hope author dont give up and improve your skill and your book will be top. good luck!
The cover of the book catches the attention of a reader. Making the book special since it’s book cover represents the main idea of the story. While the cover does this it’s also tells a little bit of the story through the picture. Mainly using non - verbal communication to talk their audience. You have perfect spelling grammar. All of your sentences are well developed and has good structure. The story you are writing is a original. I am always to excited to read the next chapters to find out what happens next. Your book is awesome and please continue writing.
Author is often unassuming but which reader knew author's prowess in selecting and spinning magnetic words into fantastic chapters making up this oh-so-delicious tale as entitled. Thanks so much for such a delectable story. Expressions and mechanical accuracy have room for improvement to further enhance the vivid imagination of the tale.
I saw that you have received a lot of feedback to improve. I will not discuss that. I think you got potential here. I am also a new writer and I understand what the challenges here. I think you're getting there, it's great. Keep on moving forward! I think the characters are great. The world was also shaped nicely. Thanks for introducing this novel to me!
Honest Review This one is hard for me to review as the genre is not one I normally read. I'll be a little generous with the stars. Overall though, you have a good story and if you can flesh out the grammar issues, many of the other issues will disappear as well if you ask me. The Good: Interesting plot, the characters have good chemistry and the FL doesn't annoy me which is a big plus. The Bad: The grammar... oh the grammar... I recommend Grammarly or getting an editor. I've probably misinterpreted some of the things that have been written, but I can't say for sure. Check your facts/units sometimes. You once gave a woman 100 inch hips, that's HUGE! Did you maybe mean 100 cm? 100 cm is much more reasonable. The Neutral: Short chapters... very short chapters, this breaks immersion in my opinion, but that is just my opinion. The structure is painful to read for me. One short sentence and a line break followed by another short sentence and a line break without grouping common sentences into paragraphs makes it look like just a lot of lines of text.
Hi there!! I’ve read a few chapters of your story so far and am pleased with it. Nice cover art as well to attract your readers. I also agree with all the reviews on grammar. Perhaps you can try grammarly? It helps edit and spots grammar mistakes which some were simple I spotted in the story. You are beginning writer so I do wish you the best of luck upon building vocab and such. I have nothing else to say other than that your story is interesting and I will continue reading. Updates seem stable and characters could use more work on the emotions but with time, I think I can see the characters slowly grow as well!! Take all reviews with great criticism and good luck on this story author~