lets_get_this_rice
After reading 25+ chapters of this story I can finally get a proper review of it. it starts of quite well, slowly building up towards the peak at around the dungeon part. I love how to story flows and how the character gets op, but it seemed to go too fast for the explained power system in my eyes. HOWEVER, I now feel it will open up much more, giving the character a real 'video game' start. The humor gives me a good chuckle and laugh from time to time, and seeing how the Mc changes (mentally and physically) could have been executed to an even better degree, but was still satisfying. as for the world, I am VERY satisfied by how much detail is being put into the different animals and species of 'Farleng'. The grammar has gotten better, but I still find minor things here and there. I hope to see some progress and development from our Mc and his companion, and romance would maybe ad a sort of balancing element for the story as a whole. Can't wait to see more. (This novel deserves to be much higher than it should be. It it truly is a *hidden gem* in my eyes) Keep it up author!
it is a great novel with a great author who reads comments and actually cares about his readers. the story is good, grammar is great as well with only occasional typos but that is nothing that can't be fixed. characters possess their own identity and are not there for the sake of it. stability of updates is great as well with chapters out on every day. Would i recommend this story? Absolutely.
I was alarmed when on transmigration the hero was offered "any" power, and sure enough, my fears came true. Expect senseless OP powerspiking non-stop, Korean-style. No balance, not even meager hint of struggle or feeling that MC is in danger. Up and Up, and Up, boosting stats and collecting skills like post stamps. If you are into shameless plot armor and constant winning of everything on your way - you might enjoy this.
Firstly this is the first time I have read a game role-playing type novel. It was an eye-opener for me. Good thing I like playing slash and kill type games (^_^). I felt like I was reading Diablo (the game) in a novel, but since I adored the game, I enjoyed the story. Some might find the book a bit on the gory side, but well this is a dungeon type role-playing game novel, don't know anyone who has ever entered a dungeon in a game and not had to slash and kill their way through. The game screen's that come up in the novel can be jarring but that is no mistake of the author, that is the limitation of using webnovel's platform - and the author should not be held accountable for it. All in all, if you like slash and kill with a side dish of gore and brains, then this is definitely a story to read. If you are a sensitive reader, then maybe you should find something different.
After 20 chapters, I can ascertain that despite frequent misspellings and grammatical errors, you write quite well! It is very descriptive, so I can easily imagine Michael moving around. I still do recommend to proofread as sometimes the mistakes can be off-putting when trying to immerse myself in the story. With such nice writing otherwise, the technical errors are such a shame really! The grammar mistakes are typically sentence fragments, too; if that’s of any help. The DNA absorption idea is very unique; it’s my first time reading such a story! So I applaud you for that! Now, I will say it does seem rather OP, but I don’t mind that all too much personally. What does somewhat bother me is Michael. He’s a pretty good MC except for the fact that he’s TOO calm. As a human, and a young 15 year-old at that, I don’t rationally see how he can accept his body changing so much. I would think he would lose some sense of self or humanity, but he’s totally fine. For instance, at first he doesn’t want to change his appearance too much, so he doesn’t want a tail. But then shortly after he decides to have a tail... Overall though, good work! Keep it up! :)
Hello there fellow Author! I like the premise of your book! There are some grammatical errors in your writing ( past tense to present tense fallacy, misplaced apostrophes next to 's' ending nouns ). However, the thoughts you want to convey are crystal clear! The story is very descriptive ( though need some editing, try adding more onomatopoeia and make sure to separate it from the dialogue ), and I can see good development with your MC! ( Despite reading only 5 chapters ) Keep writing! I hope you improve more, I can totally see your passion for writing and for the story! Good luck!
Reviewing with the latest chapter in mind. Spelling needs to be improved. Readability is fine in general. Close to 80% of the paragraphs are easy to read. Author's strength lies in his vocabulary and thus variation in sentence variety. No long or choppy sentences can be found in CH 42 and the overall weaving of the sentences presents a nuanced feel. While passive voice is kept low, close to 50 adverbs were used throughout ch 42. One adverb for every fifty words seems high but that is just my opinion. All the best!