ImBloo
Writing Quality is great, there are no rough sentences, easy to understand and the way you write the fighting scenes are good.(Kiss Of Death, Oof... I remembered DitF) Stability Updates are also good, I assume you update almost everyday. Story Development is also good, the pace is good, the fighting are good... Though, I think some of the elements are already used though, but there's no harm done, it is still unique it it's own way. Character Design is good, in Ch1, there are already too many characters, there are those that are based on some Movie or Greek mythology(Thrain, son of Thor, Oof.. Reminds me of Lord of the Rings) World Background is good, futuristic world with advance gaming technology...Seems. great. GOOD WORK AUTHOR, KEEP IT UP. *THUMBS UP*
I'm following up and from what I've seen so far, it's a very generic theme with the same things that every cliche novel has ... When we say cliché it's not in the bad sense, it's simply that something new is missing, something that sets a novel apart from other. I think I've had enough of all these novels to tell the truth. Sigh...
It true later on it is a little different,but point is you just took different idea from different novels and made it a little better. I prefer some more original ideas. No matter how you wrap something more beautifully,it is still the same item. Plus this character design is nothing new. Plenty of them out there that are similar like him. For me it is just too edgy and cliche.
You said it’s not cool to read 1 chapter and drop 1 star reviews? Your right, that’s fucking gay. Whoever does that should kill themselves. What is cool though, is not reading a single chapter and drop a 5 star review. You ask, why is that cool? Because it just is, don’t question it. So now author, I ask you a question. How’s your day?
Really interesting! Supporting my buddies excellent new work! It may be just for fun - because it is a really fun read! Now to overcome the barrier called 140 words minimum. Here's a story. It was late at night. Zeref had just closed up when he heard heavy footsteps outside. *Stomp stomp stomp*; then they stopped - right outside the bar doors. "Hello...?" He called out; but it was quiet; with just the pitter patter of rain outside. (Wait, rain...?) His eyes widened in horror. It wasn't raining. It was... Oh it's done. 140 characters reached.
The story is (as the author frequently mentions) quite the cliche. However, I don't really mind that. An author doesn't have to reinvent the wheel to write an amazing story. Fuethermore, the "second-chance VRMMORPG" genre is one of my absolute favourites. With that said, I would like to start my review. The initial summary and the positive reviews made me incredibly excited. A gunslinger in a fantasy world? How fun and imaginative! Even though it's not 100% original, I don't mind it at all! The author might seem slightly too protective of his story and (honestly?) a bit scared of constructive critism, but, once again, I don't mind. However, even after 20 chapters, the novel still doesn't seem like a VR story. Quite frankly it's like the author cant bring himself/herself to decide whether to write a LitRPG or a "transported to a different world" novel. Even characters (NPCs) that are utterly pointless (and are literally AIs) are introduced with a whole lifestory attached to them. Why? What does this information contribute to the story? It is a game. Not a real world. However, honestly I wouldn't have minded this so-called 'game' if it wasnt for the excessive swearing. The protagonist is a 34 year old pro VR gamer yet even after reincarnating he acts and talks as if he is a child. How he (supposedly) controlled a guild with 5,000,000 players in it is utterly beyond me. I know it can be difficult to write in informal language. But just adding cursewords into sentences doesn't solve it. Oh yeah, and he is called "manco" (japanese for vagina). The former void assassin, super player, reincarnated guildmaster literally adopts the name pu**y in his quest for vengence... So yeah. In conclusion: I dropped it.