Reviews of The DanMachi System
The DanMachi System
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NOTHING CHANGE!!! THE ONLY THING CHANGE IS MC IS NOT BELL.. I BETTER READ ANIME INSTEAD BECAUSE OF THIS BULLSHIT.. CANT HE JUST FUCKING GET STRONGER NOW!!!!???? WHY CREATE FANFIC WHERE MC IS LIKE THE MC IN ORIGINAL..... WE READ FANFIC COZ WE ARE BORED ON THOSE ORIGINAL WHERE MC IS WEAK!! HE STILL NEEDS TO GET SOMETHING BAD TO HAPPEN TO HIM THEN THATS WHEN HE WILL TRAIN TO GET STRONGER!.. AND FUCK? HAREM!
I'm dropping this novel and kicked it out of my library. This novel is take cannon path which only MC soul and ability changing but everything else 95% stay the same like original Danmachi. Hiding his stats? Pretending to be weak? Acting this and that so he can stay at the cannon path and afraid of change of story line? I say the story lost it's creativity. Sure many Fanfic is on cannon path but they have their own story. This story? the only improvisation is different MC soul and System everything else is same. Fuck that even Original Character name is wrong such as Arnya become Anya. MC even want Slut Goddess Freya as his lover? Fuck, did he seriously wish to get NTRed? Unless Freya could change like EP:IC. But i bet it won't.
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This is literally just a copy of the original story, it's all canon apart from the tiniest of things, like a bit of extra romance, having enough balls to date the girls, no R-18 as far as I've read yet either, no badassery. It's literally the same as the canon. The author doesn't seem to know how to deviate from the plot even slightly. He could've handled the Lily route in a different way and it would've been fine, however he decided to "let her steal the knife" for no reason. Why couldn't he just catch her in the act and then punished her a little? despite her circumstances she still betrayed his trust. Then he could've helped her all he wanted, however he's still putting on the ***** act and acting weaker than he is to go according to the canon. I'm not gonna say everything is the exact same, however it's 90% canon at the very least. So if you want DanMachi Vanilla but in text then read this story. Author, quite frankly. I think you might actually be proud of this so far however, from what I've read you've stuck straight to the canon like a baby to a breast. Have some balls and actually add some of your own story.
Summary vs Reality. No more being a whimp vs never have conversations with beautiful woman without blushing. Beside this big lie you writing is below average , nobody normal would like to read this and enjoy your story telling because you don't have any writing skills . Despite that at beginning you say that this be no Cannon and later he be like " Oh in next 5 days I must be on this dungeon lv to meet him and him to keep story up" and you good know why because you don't have nothing interesting to add to story and probably in next few days create patreon and start ask people for money.
M.C is from earth and yet all his magic abilities are just for show. He never once tries to use any magic even though he can. Dude... M.C is from earth.!! What are you doing.!?? And Harem.??? Seriously.??? The story hasn't even started properly and yet harem.?? This fanfic is more about a guy running around and picking up girls for harem than a proper story.
This... This really hurts that the novel has been dropped it was flawless to me. Read the whole thing straight, I beleive I did not even blink. To afraid I would miss a word. AUTHOR, if you see this, I want you to know that your novel is amazing and I am glad to have ever read it and I will be the first to read it when you post again.
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