MishalZamir
I enjoyed the back and forth between the main characters. I think what they do and what they are thinking are different at times. You explain each sentence beautifully. I just wish the chapters were longer. I feel like the breaks between chapters makes the events lose their momentum. Overall I see where this story is heading and it seems interesting. I'm not into romance focused stories, but this one feels very refreshing. Best of luck to you author.
*Remember, this review is based on the first 5 chapters* Constructive Criticism: Try to come up with and stick to an update schedule, even if that means not posting every chapter you complete when you complete it. Positive Feedback: Well written, original plot. Good update rate. You definitely know how to be descriptive.;,;. Personal Feedback: I see much promise for the future of this novel. Sadly, this novel holds no interest to me, therefore I will not be continuing it any further. Scores: WQ 5/5 SoU 4/5 SD 5/5 CD 5/5 WB 4/5
The story is interesting but seems to be targeted towards teenagers. Maybe it was because of the names but it felt like Spanish soap operas. There was quite a few grammatical mistakes in the earlier chapters. They are less noticeable in the later chapters. Paragraphs can be too long sometimes. Since some of the chapters can be quite short, it would be good if you can update more often.
I also not into romance story much less from female POV but for giving a fair review. I proudly read it! I can see your improvement chapter by chapter. In early chapter, there a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes but decreasing as the story go on.. You can edit previous chapter you know.. Do consider space after (.) or (,)