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[Not Current! Click other version!] The Summoner and Contractor System
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A well done system novel!!! The system isn't all telling or all knowing it seems. There are no cringy dichromatic eyes or an MC that was the chosen one from birth/rebirth. The story flows well and is worth a continuing read IMO. I'll keep spitting into a bottle and reading this to see where it goes!
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Hello, your novel has been reviewed by Virtual Bookshelf. A review excerpt is as follows: Prologue: Great beginning. It gives insight into the main character and his life in well-balanced detail. All the while, it hooks the reader in with the robbery. The idea of robbery isn’t original, but the scene is written well and allows readers to imagine the scene clearly in their heads. There’s also a great balance of emotion to the end, and the robbers’ characters are differentiated and realistic rather than being ****** ‘bad guys.’ Technical & Writing Style: The writing is very well done overall with few mistakes. Complex sentences are pulled off for the most part. Sometimes they feel a little awkward. For example, “The voice immediately stunned Rentaro, before he reacted in an enlivened manner, filled with both fright and a little bit of excitement.” The dependent clauses after Rentaro don’t flow and connect to the previous as well as it could. Imagine, “The voice immediately stunned Rentaro, before he reacted in an enlivened manner.” This part itself doesn’t sound right, and with the addition of the second comma and clause, it adds to the awkward sentence structure. It’s unclear whether the fright and bit of excitement is connected to the stunned Rentaro, or the reacting in an enlivened manner. To keep the sentence close to the original format, one suggestion is, “The voice immediately stunned Rentaro; before he reacted in an enlivened manner, he was filled with both fright and a little bit of excitement.” There are other ways to clarify the sentence if this isn’t the intended order of emotions. Writing style-wise, you have a nice range of vocabulary and structure your sentences in engaging ways which highlight the order of small actions and gestures and give it believability and vividness in imagery and sensation. Be careful of character identity/name mistakes like in chapter 11, “Rentaro noticed to his astonishment that only Roy’s left eye was ice-blue, while his right eye took on a more grayish-hue. Compared to Rentaro’s height of one hundred seventy centimeters tall, Roy was relatively shorter at around one hundred fifty centimeters and he had a light skin tone.” Roy is actually Icrin. .........(cont.) The full review: https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/03/04/review-the-summoner-and-contractor-system-shotgun9494/ After ten chapters, you may request to be assessed again. Thank you, and the best of luck on your writing endeavors! :)
Good story so far..... Don't drop it And plz update more tried of waiting for chapter.. _________________________________________________________________________-_-------_-_-_-_&-_-_-_-_-&-) ;®] ¦§] ¶] ¦] >] ¦¥|¶] §|;®;>] |]}] ™¥¦|;} ;©] ™€¦|;©€™¿€^$|] <] >] ¦|;<;™] >] ¦] <] ®¥¦] |] ®>] ¦¥} ;©€>$|©] ™>] |] <€®[>|] |;} ;<] |;©;>¦¥|[<;<] |¥|] |] <] ™¥¦¥|;<;™€~¿€¦;¦÷< ®÷>] |] {;©] >¦] \€} ¬ ¡¿$~€™€®¥©[} <] <] ¬[¦;¦÷¦÷|<÷^[ ^
It's extremely well written a couple of spelling mistakes but honestly it happens to the best of us but overall beautifully written. It sucks you in and has a way of making you connect with the MC Rentaro (Everytime I read his name I thought of Hamtaro and the theme music would start) as for not doing the harem thing, it is different but almost there. In a sense the MC is making contracts with different beings if you will and gives you more of a family feel or a guild but at the same time there is something more then love between friends. If I'm wrong I am so sorry but I totally get a BL vibe from MC and Wilhelm. It's interesting that a system has humanoid feelings and would love to know how he came to be but I guess that's later on. The only downside is there is a lot of info about how everything works the upside there is a lot of info😀 it's a double edge sword it's great that it's not one of those novels that doesn't explain anything and leave the readers wonder wtf just happened but at the same time it wow too much for my brain to keep this all straight, at least for me and don't even think I let Roy slip. Robin's clothes, Roy, fire emblem hurray through in Icrin and you have smash bro Melee! If (wrote this review after reading chapter 12) you get into the romance end of it we're he finds 'the one' I would love to see it ridiculous awkward and cringe worthy to melt people's hearts and make them feel more in tune with the MC. Then it will become a masterpiece!
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